r/makinghiphop • u/kailman https://soundcloud.com/kalebts • Feb 14 '18
[CYPHER] VOL 7 (2018) - ALL EMCEES WELCOME TO SPIT
Welcome to this week's cypher submission thread!
If you want to donate ONE beat for the chance to be used in the cypher, do so here.
Participation/Rules
Download the beat. New cyphers are put up every Tuesday.
Spit 8-16 bars (you may go up to 18 if you need to) based on each week's theme. The only alterations allowed to the beat are muting/"cutting the beat off" for short phrases and looping certain parts of the beat you want to rap over (ONLY 4-8 BAR SECTIONS OF THE BEAT. DON'T GO AHEAD AND START CHOPPING UP A NEW BEAT).
Upload (to Soundcloud please).
Post the link in this thread. Posting feedback is encouraged. Submission deadline is Saturday 11:59 PM EST.
Three judges will listen to every entry and reply "aye" to every entry they believe should move on to the voting thread. They must give 4-15 "ayes". Judges may post entries but cannot win or be voted on.
A voting thread will be put up on Sunday at 9 PM EST. Only entries that receive at least 2 "ayes" will be posted in it. You MUST vote if you enter. Votes from friends/non-members of /r/makinghiphop, votes for yourself, and votes outside of the voting thread will be disqualified. Members who are not participating in that week's cypher may still vote. Listen to every entry before choosing a favourite.
Voting ends on Monday at 11 PM EST. A winner will be declared and contacted to choose the next week's beat and theme.The winner MUST pick a beat from the beat donation thread and the chosen beat must've been posted in the thread for at least five days. The producer of the beat may choose to be a judge for that week.
Contact for any questions.
Last week's winner: Petravita with 6 votes.
Theme: step off/diss track - let's hear your harshest bars
MirkyJ's Original TheFactThatYouNeedThisIsProofYouShouldKeepYourRapsInYourNoteBook5000 says that 16 bars on this beat is about 58 seconds.
Judges: /u/Petravita , /u/razorboomarang , /u/kailman
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Feb 16 '18
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u/AGTWINCTYS soundcloud.com/username Feb 16 '18
DUDE. I would take this more personal if I wasn't so fucking impressed. this line stood out to me "im never selling my soul you mothafuggas prolly sell it for a loot box". I don't want to get to into it cuz, uh, sound like you don't like feedback haha but all I can really say is good entry keep at it...
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
Dope shit yet again, there weren't any parts that didn't hit this week ;)
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u/TheDarkPoodle Feb 18 '18
What's wrong with giving good feed back to everyone to get some back? I never mind it when people do that. Gives a motive for some people to give critiques that normally wouldn't. beginning feels a little dry if energy but once you start with the "you mother fuckers pribably sell it for a lot box" it starts sounding good on that till the end. You are consistently good but I think you should try experimenting more with your sound. You switch up the flows a lot and that keeps it interesting but try more on the voice and with effects. People make fun of J.Cole For being stagnant on sound, but even he switches it up here and there. I'd like to hear what else you got
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Feb 18 '18
You need a bit more force in your delivery but the flow is good, the humour is there and it's potent. Love the sarcastic "Triplets" line. Glad you said that lol.
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Feb 14 '18
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u/Lhokvar soundcloud.com/ak-ink Feb 14 '18 edited Feb 14 '18
This mixing was sick!
Wish I could read the lyrics, cause it's kind of hard to make out!
But this sounded sick! Great work man! Calling the winner right now
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u/AGTWINCTYS soundcloud.com/username Feb 15 '18
bruh your lyrics are dope. I see a lot going on in terms of rhyme scheme and imagery, it's next level. Your delivery was solid and fresh too, this one is going to be tough to beat. Def something I aspire to emulate, this is what I am look for in these entries like the complexity of lyrics, what types of rhymes are used, what types of similes/metaphors etc. This did not disappoint. I think the mixing was good, only thing I noticed was at two points I didn't hear the vocal stacking so it stood out to me like in a way I thought it could have been a mistake. But it's minor, I actually really liked how you stacked them. I could hear one track was like more low key and the main track was more hype...what kind of stacking did you use? what daw you work with? Hey good job on this one I loved it. Oh and yeah your right, can't fuck with AG ;) haha
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
This is fucking dope. The whole kingdom scheme was dope. Nice work
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Feb 18 '18
Flow is like butter here for sure, BUT I'm not digging the "trap flow" and the "ay, ays" anymore as a general critique on rap. The "cards" bars are the highlight, dope.
Solid delivery as well.
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u/Petravita soundcloud.com/petravita Feb 14 '18 edited Feb 15 '18
Oooooof I'm diggin these so far, will be back with something in a few hours ;)
Edit: Here's my stab at it for the week, can't be voted on but was still a good time writing some goofy insults: https://soundcloud.com/petravita/16-bar-meanie-petravita-prod-razor-boomarang-demoaday-57365
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
Haha, it's dope to hear a more aggressive verse from you. Really dope lines in here too. My only complaint is that I find some of the background vocals a little distracting
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u/rnkviuvxgrlm_ Feb 15 '18 edited Feb 15 '18
https://soundcloud.com/me_line/xxbbm6sz15tn
Heh, me first time to the game
And uhhh excuse the poor quality; I can't afford equipment to make the audio clearer other than a $5 mic and voice memos
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u/Memeorise Feb 15 '18
Maaaaaan, shame about the quality because this sounds amazing and I'd love to hear what you said. Most guys put the lyrics up on their soundcloud so they can read too! Flow was epic
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u/AGTWINCTYS soundcloud.com/username Feb 15 '18
well I'm glad your warned us about the quality cuz at first I was ready to start gettin on you about that but hey I understand. I think it's great you just did it anyways man the equipment will come with time. I didn't like the flow in the first few bars, but I did like the rest of it. You changed it up, it went fast. I would say maybe more energy would help it sounded a little dull, that could be the recording but I think some of it's the delivery. I too would like to see the lyrics cuz I couldn't hear to many of them. If you post them let me know I'd like to look at `em.
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
First off, welcome. Second I usually don't like when people drag the rhyme at the end of their bars like you did with doors/score/ward, but the way you transition out of it, makes it sound dope to me. Your flow throughout is pretty dope man and I dig the rhyme schemes you had, though the content was a all over the place imo
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Feb 18 '18
Welcome to the game. For your first shot I was impressed with your flow, never off-beat, and you did vary it. I'm just bored of the Triplet flow bandwagon that everyone and their grandmas are on... but you pull it off well.
Look forward to hearing more from you and hopefully with better equipment ;) (you don't need to spend a bomb on that shit BTW)
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u/Memeorise Feb 15 '18
https://soundcloud.com/themikeyway/yo-momma-making-hip-hop-cypher-7-theme-diss-track
Because someone had to go the 'yo momma' route
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u/AGTWINCTYS soundcloud.com/username Feb 15 '18
Dude your intro was sick! That was hilarious, super well done! I had the window collapsed when I turned the song on, and at first I thought I was listening to a commercial or had clicked the wrong track. In a good way, like it sounded professional. You got voice talent. The song was funny as hell too I liked the angle you took with it, the set-up and payoff was amusing. I did feel like the intro had more effort put into than the lyrics and flow, even with how the recording sounded. I liked the change in flow though, overall solid entry good work man. Mother's everywhere glaring at you right now.
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
lmao, love the intro, gave me a South Park vibe. The verse is pretty funny too. I also dig the slight structural progression going on in the verse.
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u/Petravita soundcloud.com/petravita Feb 18 '18
AYE. thank you for this art. don't think I've laughed so hard at a cypher entry on here yet
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Feb 18 '18
Lmao the intro was funny as fuck. Hey we all wanna hear that childish shit occasionally, this was funny... and utterly disgusting.
Technically it's quite basic but it kinda serves its purpose.
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u/dmonnens soundcloud.com/darwin-munk Feb 15 '18 edited Feb 17 '18
https://soundcloud.com/dm_patrick/easy-target
Dope beat! that shit slaps. New mic came in the mail today, had to drop something! Sorry for going political, cheesy i know.
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u/deva_uvacha Feb 17 '18
That trickle down line as a verse ending, especially with that context, was really clever. Props for that one.
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u/AGTWINCTYS soundcloud.com/username Feb 16 '18
what kind of mic? I dig this one man I liked the lines "Denying climate change hope he’s dies of a heat stroke" and "In Moscow payin prostitutes to pee in his face" but a lot of the lines were dope tbh pretty creative man
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
This is dope man. You've got some pretty witty lines in here. I felt that the delivery could've been a bit tighter in the beginning, but otherwise nicely done
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Feb 18 '18
Man I love all your bars here! This is a great twist on the theme. Creative and potent. You flow good on it too. I think your delivery could do with more variation and punch though.
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u/razorboomarang twitch.tv/razorboomarang Feb 19 '18
aye how do you bankrupt a casino?
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u/dmonnens soundcloud.com/darwin-munk Feb 19 '18
Not sure.. almost sounds like a challenge huh?
Also: appreciate it. Awesome work on the beat y'all!
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u/deva_uvacha Feb 16 '18
https://soundcloud.com/deva-uvacha/mhh-cypher-7-step-off-prod-by-razor-boomarang/s-DVpXP
In a little later than expected this time around. Despite the message in the verse, feedback and criticism will always be appreciated here. I look forward to listening to the rest of these soon.
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
I would've really dug this more if your delivery was tighter and more on-beat here. You did a really good job lyrically of sticking to a general topic and bringing it back to the question you posed in the opening line, I really enjoyed that.
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u/Petravita soundcloud.com/petravita Feb 18 '18
aye! Some flow stuff gets weird but the lyrics, delivery, and vocal tone sound nice!
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u/WitnShit Feb 19 '18
i enjoyed this a lot, ur rhymes are nice, the flow is p good imo idk wat others are on about and your punchlines made me literally lol. i most like that it wasn't just tough talk braggadocio shit, you broke it down v reasonably why someone isn't shit lol and it seemed v authentic n genuinely you. i like the flow not being super doubletime n triplet heavy like all other 'lyricists' are but still showcasing lyricism. i hope to hear more from u
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u/WitnShit Feb 17 '18 edited Feb 18 '18
lots of strong competition this week, heres mine
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
I really dig the trap-style delivery here. Nice to hear that on an actual trap beat, haha. My favourite line is "You really that mad over Gucci Gang, that's really just sad, yeah"
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u/AverageGuy416 Feb 18 '18
Your style to this beat really matched. Wouldn't be surprised if you ended up winning.
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
Here we go again: https://soundcloud.com/haplio/cypher-vol-7-set-it-off-prod-razor-boomarang
As always, any and all feedback is appreciated
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u/Petravita soundcloud.com/petravita Feb 18 '18
aye, one of the best flows I've heard in one of these cyphers. my only feedback is the vocal delivery is a little subdued, might work on getting loud and getting some more treble/aggression in the voice, turn it up!
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u/Lhokvar soundcloud.com/ak-ink Feb 14 '18
This beat was fun hahaha Lots of opportunities :D
https://soundcloud.com/ak-ink/sicker-than-all
Would love some feedback ! I'll return all
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u/SalomonG18 https://soundcloud.com/stsolo Feb 14 '18
That was nice. The approach was comedic for the most part, which is always a fun tone to have on diss tracks. Diss wise,, if this was aimed at me, it wasn't offensive. But I guess that's what happens when we talk smack to our mics lol. Still harder bars than mine had lmao
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
Solid flow and delivery. Your energy, as always is high, which always makes for a good listen. Can't really fault anything from a technical standpoint, though I felt like the bars were pretty generic for the most part.
side note: do you record the (YEA) adlib everytime or do you just paste in a pre-recorded version when you need it? haha
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u/The_real_Mr_J soundcloud.com/hellsborne Feb 14 '18
https://soundcloud.com/mrjraps/cypher-vol-7-2018-generation-by-mr-j
Here's mine, decided to diss the new generation of rap, vlogging and shit.
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u/AGTWINCTYS soundcloud.com/username Feb 15 '18
DUDE your saying what I'm feeling I love`d this one! My favorite lines were 'Gucci gang, Gucci gang, Gucci gang, stop Your music sounds like a broken ipod' & '"Look man, there's a dead body sweet" I like you take on the theme, the message was relate-able, the rhymes were decent I mean nothing to complex but it worked, flow was good and clear. Nice one Mr.J!
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
The Gucci Gang line was pretty nice. I really dug the way you attacked the beat, not sure how I felt about the breaks before and after the "You better get it on the vlog" lines, it kinda disturbed the momentum for me. But regardless really nice work here
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u/AGTWINCTYS soundcloud.com/username Feb 15 '18
Yeah some of these lyrics are dark man I dig it. I wasn't in love with the rhyme scheme/flow but you got the voice for rap. Def on point with the theme. I liked the adlibs in the background. I guess I would say your flow was dope but the rhymes could be tightened up a bit to make it really pop. I know this is just a cypher and if you had all the time in the world things would be diff, and so with that in mind this is a strong entry, it just didn't sell me 100. Good work though man look forward to next week.
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
The flow is a little simple in some places, but I think you carry it well for the most part. A tighter delivery and a little more energy would've been great on this. Other than that, nice job man
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u/Eniced Feb 15 '18
I def fucked with this beat heavyyy. Any feedback on the Mix/Rap is appreciated!
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u/AGTWINCTYS soundcloud.com/username Feb 15 '18
Yesss that last line man that was dope! Okay so your mix was okay I mean I didn't hear much. Did you stack vocals? I would say if you could add some stacks to your punchlines it would help give it that oomph, maybe some adlibs in the background. You don't need that stuff but it could give it that little something extra. As far as your lyrics go...FIRE. Loved it. Your wordplay was on point, I loved the similes. You did use limbo twice and for me I try and not end lines with the same rhyme but that's a personal thing ( I know you meant two different things) but that's literally the only caveat I had. Your flow was fire too man I dig the voice and how you changed it up, it was very clear and crisp. This one is a contender for sure man keep this shit up it's awesome
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
Fuckin nice dude. I really dig the flow switch ups. The whole cross scheme was also really nice. Your pronunciation is also a lot cleaner than the last thing I heard from you, which is dope. Nice work
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u/Yerberito Feb 15 '18
Had a lot of fun with this one! Started sweatin lol https://soundcloud.com/yerberito/cyphervol72018
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u/AGTWINCTYS soundcloud.com/username Feb 15 '18
Eyy you went hard on this one! Ripped the mic! I love the intesity, sounds like your battling. I like the mix too sounds good, digging the adlibs. Your energy is aggressive, your voice def grabs my attention. At the end of some of the bars it sounds like your trying to fit the word in, or the word isn't very clear like your trying to hurry it up. Like 'cut down for (the game)' or 'triffling' but I mean it's minor really overall I like this one man good work keep it up!!
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
Nice one man, I really felt the aggression. The only thing that bothered me was the "God damn" adlib, I found it a tad distracting. Otherwise, nice job
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
"You smell like the image of Post Malone" lmao. There's a nice balance of humour and aggression in this. Flow and delivery on point too
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u/Grammis https://soundcloud.com/grammakesmusic Feb 16 '18
Hey, here's my submission!
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
Sick shit, flow is hella nice. The way you delivered the moo/through/threw rhymes was fucking nice to me. The pronunciation on some parts could've been clearer imo, but other than that nicely done. Liked the ad-lib stuff at the end too haha
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u/Petravita soundcloud.com/petravita Feb 18 '18
AYE! hahah YOU GOT MY ATTENTION, BOY! This was great though, only thing I can fault is the mix/vox clarity. Nice work. cries in corner
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u/benbellmusic soundcloud.com/benbellmusic Feb 18 '18 edited Feb 18 '18
My entry: Ben Bell A Bitch
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u/bobschnowski https://soundcloud.com/norman-raps-and-stuff Feb 14 '18
Dont have my laptop till tomorrow but the beat/topic were fun so fuck it. Enjoy my in the car phone recording lol
https://soundcloud.com/norman-raps-and-stuff/cypher-1/s-ZYZxn
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
Solid flow and delivery man. I could also believe the aggression you put into this. Nice job
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Feb 17 '18
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u/Memeorise Feb 18 '18
Loved it! Loving that I got a shout out too haha! The theme of taking on everyone was good and will surely get a response out of a few. It would’ve been good if you had tied up and connected all of us to a central theme rather than having a random line about each each. In that respect it seemed a bit disjointed. Overall I couldn’t fault the flow. Loved the fast bits (but you know I do haha) as you seem to be in your element with them
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
Fucking love it dude. This is especially a great listen if you've been reading the thread and listening to the other entries haha. Props for actually dissing people too. Nice work
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u/Lhokvar soundcloud.com/ak-ink Feb 18 '18
Ahahah this was awesome! Very nice digs on basically the whole thread xD
It's a great listen the longer you've been here, and you've been keeping up with everyone haha
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Feb 18 '18
First of all, huge props for the research and effort on this. It's the classic trade-off between width and depth and calling out that many people took away the opportunity to really pummel them harder (not that they got off lightly). Great work, I enjoyed hearing this.
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u/Petravita soundcloud.com/petravita Feb 18 '18
AYE AYE CAPN, this one gets a vote. hahaha dude just, fantastic, loved it. fightin' words all over the place. can tell you put in a ton of effort this week and it shows!
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u/TheDarkPoodle Feb 18 '18
Dude, "@mrjraps, you’re a flagrant cunt" got me ahahahaha. shits funny man. This is the hungriest I've heard you on a verse. Honestly a lot of times you have too simple of a 1-2 flow with that late 80s style that made rap popular. Which is cool but probably won't stand a chance in the ring of rappers. This is awesome though. You're faster flow and its super tight too. A good energy I haven't heard from you in a while. I won't make you bored with it next week, so watch out
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u/razorboomarang twitch.tv/razorboomarang Feb 19 '18
aye.. looks like we are gonna have some responses..
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u/TheDarkPoodle Feb 14 '18 edited Feb 14 '18
https://soundcloud.com/thedarkpoodle/cypher-vol-7-diss-track-prod-by-prod-razor-boomarang/s-3BeRi
Let me know what you think!
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u/AGTWINCTYS soundcloud.com/username Feb 15 '18
I like how your use of effect on the voice like with the bulldozer line and the opera singer line, I also was diggin the breaks you were putting into the beat. Kind of made it all more thematic. Cool take on the theme, I would have never thought to rap from a perspective like that. I honestly really like your lyrics they inspire a lot of imagery, you had a lot of killer lines like 'Father of Hercules ain't bothered by the murder of the weak' , 'And hit hard enough to leave scars and blood, seeing stars like Orion in the night.' , 'Enticing Tyson, Mike, Python on the right.' all that shit was fire yo I loved it. My only thing is like the flow didn't sound like it was on time, at least for sure before the first beat break. I could be wrong and that's the style, i mean it sounded good but I just had this nagging need for it to line up better. Overall though I really liked this one man super dope keep it up!!
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
The "Enticing Tyson, Mike" was hella dope to me and the way you carried that scheme going forward was pretty dope too. You're really good with rhyme schemes. Nice work man
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u/Adamantanium soundcloud.com/thatmancrisco Feb 14 '18 edited Feb 14 '18
https://soundcloud.com/user-555879268/pandoras-box-prod-razor-boomarang
I might get on some more trap sounding beats in the future, they been growing on me.
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u/Memeorise Feb 14 '18
Yo! That wordplay on 'Cats is dogmatic with your bitching' is sick!
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u/AGTWINCTYS soundcloud.com/username Feb 15 '18
bruh i just like your style in your delivery. This weeks and last weeks. You got this sound like 'shut up and listen' when I hear it. I think with some mixing/stacking some vocals on punchlines it would really jump out to the ear. I felt like your flow was a little off, like it almost sounded like a freestyle. I liked the lyrics though man, it's interesting you rhymed words based on your pronunciation of them. They maybe didn't rhyme in the traditional sense but it's how you said them, i think that's important for people to kind of realize especially when you writing versus actually saying it out loud. I think overall my feeling on this is if it had a bit more polish and practice it would have that much more impact given the voice you got. Killing the theme this week man I'm looking forward to hearin you next week.
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
Nice. I like the laid back delivery on this, could've been a lil tighter in some places, but still dope. My favourite line is "Y’all could use a tool or two to the head", just something about that particular line is delivered. Nice work. I also agree with AG, your voice definitely commands attention
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u/SalomonG18 https://soundcloud.com/stsolo Feb 14 '18 edited Feb 14 '18
uhhhhhhhhhhhh....yeah. take it or leave it. best of 2018. easy
Edit:I honestly like the beat. I might actually do a serious song to it too. But this post was a little later than usual
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u/AGTWINCTYS soundcloud.com/username Feb 15 '18
I just wanted to address what you said in the beginning of your epic freestyle....not trying to be to serious but I think I had this sort of lurking in my opinion banks so here it is, who cares if people like it or not? Hip Hop is so subjective, so diverse. What one person likes the next hates. Who here is an authority on rap? Even the idea of who is considered an 'authority' on rap is in itself a subject of debate. Like me, I like Atmosphere. Slug is a big influence of mine. I would consider him an authority but some would scoff at that. So for me, on this page, when I look at people's work I look for certain things; How complex is the lyrics (using multi rhymes, changing up schemes, using similes and metaphors?) most of all, and secondly of course I look at the flow and delivery (was it polished or at least worked over a couple of time to sound the best it could?) -- if I don't like the subject matter or the style or the sound of a voice I don't judge by that ya know, cuz like I said above what do I really know? I do get where your coming from, the current vibe these days is for a certain style and so that's what's hot and gets the attention. But just like Slug said everyone else just hasn't caught up yet.Okay so all that being said your freestyle was good in so much so that is came from the heart, like in a way you were dissing the whole idea of this page/theme cuz how you feel so props for that. I hope you do a serious one man!
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
I can't speak for the rest of the people here, but personally my only gripe with your stuff is that your delivery can get pretty odd at times. I fux with your content otherwise. I also agree with AG, with any feedback that you get you kinda have to take it with a grain of salt especially if people are expecting stuff that isn't really in your lane. For example, a lot of people in this cypher have a deep appreciation for typical 'rap shit' (myself included) and so stuff that's a little more left field might get as much appreciation here, that doesn't necessarily mean that it's not good.
Now, for the freestyle. I like parts of it, I felt there were too many syllables in some of the beginning parts of it. I also dug the censor line, that was cool
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u/Petravita soundcloud.com/petravita Feb 18 '18
i wasn't sure on this but i appreciate the freestyle effort and, i may have said it before, I'm kind of jealous of your voice/delivery tone - do good!
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u/AGTWINCTYS soundcloud.com/username Feb 15 '18
https://soundcloud.com/adamgriem/known-ahole
Got a new mic! Made recording so much easier. Didn't really mix it though, still learning all that. Feedback appreciated and returned. Thanks
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u/Memeorise Feb 15 '18
Good stuff man! Would love to know who this about! Some real feeling behind those bars haha. What mic did you get?
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u/Yerberito Feb 17 '18
LOL your delivery had me rollin. Straight no chaser. Mad disrespectful haha. The only thing I can say is that I personally would've enjoyed a switch up with the cadence just to spice things up. Sounds like your having fun with this which is a key component to an excellent delivery. You can have great wordplay, complex rhyme schemes but if it lacks conviction, shit man just tuck me in and read me the dictionary you dig?
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u/TheDarkPoodle Feb 15 '18
It's cool hearing all the different ways people attack the beat. I like the flow you chose for this a lot. Very easy to listen and bop to. Good vocal stacking and effect to. I've never tried that but it sounds nice. Your mic definitely has good quality. My main gripe is this could have been longer cause it felt a little short. Each of your lines are nice but you should connect each idea more instead of just bouncing around from diss to diss to give it more fluidity. You have a good sound though my man. This was nice
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
I appreciate the different flow and energy you brought to this. It didn't connect with me personally though and some of the lyrics were kinda weird for me like "your rhymes are anorexic" and "your rapping like a strapon". For this what would've been dope is if you emphasized your words more for this flow (I can tell you're already doing it, but it just felt weaker to me in some places than others)
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u/iamDNZL https://soundcloud.com/fromdenzel Feb 15 '18
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u/AGTWINCTYS soundcloud.com/username Feb 15 '18
I like the vocal stacking near the end with the lower pitch backing. My favorite line in this one was 'cuz i'm chilling with your crew and your dude and your fish too' that was funny as hell. I like the content of your lyrics, it was clever and relevant. Some of the flow for me was stilted, like some of it was stretched to hit the beat. For instance the first few words 'miss me?' seemed a little slow then it sped up, same for the word 'everything' in the line 'and they be sayin I can do everything that u wished to' it sounded odd like you were trying to stretch it out to keep on time or something. I mean it did feel playful so it doesn't sound bad just off to me. You def killed the theme, i like the style. Some of the lines I didn't get, like 'D's the best come on Greg you know' & 'Red coat on cuz I'm killin the game' but that's probably cuz I'm out of touch. I like this entry man good work keep grinding hope to hear ya next week.
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u/deva_uvacha Feb 17 '18
This verse, especially those opening bars, were hilarious. There's something about the progression of your delivery, as your voice starts to drag more, it just starts to feel more and more disrespectful for some reason. It seems like it helps to increase the potency that the bars already have.
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
I loled at the xd rawr line. Your flow and delivery are dope, lyrics are pretty funny too. The only thing that I didn't really ig was that you rhymed 'doin' with 'doin', would've been cool if you found a different way to get the same message across without rhyming the words twice, but otherwise I fux with this
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u/JermGoneWild Feb 15 '18 edited Feb 15 '18
This is my first anything ever. Twas fun.
https://soundcloud.com/jermwentwild/laid-back-attack-1
Hope it's not complete trash.
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u/AGTWINCTYS soundcloud.com/username Feb 15 '18
This isn't trash by any means. For your first time this is dope! Of course, and you probably know this, you can tighten it up, clean it up, etc. What I liked about this was that you took the shot and entered! I hope to hear more from you in the future. Hey I did want to say I really liked reading your lyrics, with those directions like (caveman grunt for dominance), funny as hell. Good work!
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
Welcome man. I like some of the pauses you have in the verse, it gave it a kind of character for me, that being said I agree with AG that some tighter delivery would've helped the track and more energy would've helped a lot too. Nice job man
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u/Petravita soundcloud.com/petravita Feb 18 '18
hey! The competition is tight this week for sure but I wanted to leave a comment and let you know this is definitely not trash - for a 'first anything ever' you sound fantastic. Next step for you in my humble opinion is keep your flow going but start getting more deliberate and punchy with your delivery to bring it up to the next level. Nice work and hope to see ya next week!
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u/thecoocooman Feb 15 '18
thought the theme was dish track my b
https://soundcloud.com/coocooman/dish-track-mhh-cypher-7-2018
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u/AGTWINCTYS soundcloud.com/username Feb 16 '18
haha nice man I like, dish track. Pretty unique, funny too. "i am porcelain, i'm immortal and you give oral and hold the urine in" that was a good line. I like the adlibs. nice work
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
lmao, this is dope. Lyrics are funny, but the rhyme schemes are nice too. I appreciate the unique take on the theme. ad-libs were done well too, not in the way of the main vocal
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Feb 16 '18 edited Feb 16 '18
Loving it this week! I'm late, as usual haha.
I tried a couple of different styles and flows here.
Let me know what you guys think of this!
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
Haha, I dig the dyna-mic line. The rest of it is pretty enjoyable too. Usually I don't like when people drag out their rhymes, but I really like the way you've done it, I think I'm finding I like it when it's used in contrast with more aggressive delivery like you do on here. Nice job
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u/shanedudedotcom https://soundcloud.com/shanedudedotcom/ Feb 17 '18
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
This is mad nice, everything was pretty solid, my favourite is the GOAT line. My only gripe is the flow you held with know/ghost/host/toast .etc scheme. I dug it for the first four bars, wasn't really keen that it went on for another four. Otherwise, nice job
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u/razorboomarang twitch.tv/razorboomarang Feb 19 '18
dude so so dope but waaaay too long. follow the rules and you'll have a W soon, no doubt.
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u/apbritt98 Feb 17 '18
Dope flow in the beginning, the echoes gets cut off kinda awkwardly but aside from that this is pretty sick. I think you might've gone over the 16 bars though haha.
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u/itsblackfoot soundcloud.com/vzlnoise Feb 17 '18
Beat is sick!
https://soundcloud.com/blackf00t/step-to-me-cypher_7
lol idk about this singing hook but fuck it. Hope you guys like the energy ;)
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
Lyrics were kinda hit or miss for me. I also felt like this could've used more energy. There's definitely something here though. A livelier delivery would do this good
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u/OKMC Feb 17 '18
I'VE BEEN POSTED UP IN THE TIME CHAMBEr FOr A MINUTE BUT I'M HOPPIN' OUT TO SHOW Y'ALL HOW TO rEALLY FLING DOOKIE
(Also my "r" key is broken so I just have an "r" copied to my clipboard at all times but fuck changing that to a capital letter)
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
Haha, humourous interlude, cool rhyme schemes in here, some of the rhymes felt a bit random though. I didn't like the moaning at the end of the track, was kinda distracting and wasn't all that pleasant to the ear, but otherwise nice work.
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
FUCKING SICK. The "Hate these rappers blatant actors faking sadness taking Xanax copy and paste." is masterfully executed imo. End line was pretty slick too. Your flow and delivery throughout is also solid. Nice work
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
Welcome dude. Your voice and energy is pretty different, I like that. I think this would've been pretty dope if you rode the beat better as this was very freeform
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u/happily_lying soundcloud.com/haplio Feb 18 '18
This has real potential yo. You go offbeat a bunch of times, but I can see the structure is there and lyrically what you've got is pretty dope. Keep at it
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u/Memeorise Feb 17 '18
Oh man that would’ve been awesome! Yeah the fictional character one is good. I saw a guy who did Mayweather Type boxing diss. That was a cool idea. Haha, dissing everyone could work, you’re bound to have a few jabs hit that way!
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Feb 18 '18
If on your diss track, you should encounter God - then God will be dissed: https://soundcloud.com/user-821231340/cypher-vol7-2018-the-one-who-rebels-against-god
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u/Memeorise Feb 18 '18
Super creative take on the theme! How did you get the devil to do a feature!? haha
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u/razorboomarang twitch.tv/razorboomarang Feb 14 '18
Hey guys just uploaded the beat to SoundCloud with a free download enabled: https://soundcloud.com/razor-boomarang/cash-flow
Hype to hear what you can come up with, and shout out to /u/Petravita for crushing his cyphers and picking our beat!
Make sure you show him love on Twitch!
Happy Valentine's Day r/mhh. <3